Wednesday, May 27, 2015

Alyssa - The little black chest

Maddison and I walked on a dusty, oaky wooden floor. Our faces tremble in fear, our knees wobbling like jelly and our surroundings," ugh mossy cobblestone walls" as I whisper to Maddison. The room smelled like a sulphur pool mixed with rotten eggs. Maddison sees a old table with a little black chest. We came closer to have a better look at it. ...so as she lifted the lid... I tell her to stop but it was to late, she opens it and the chest screamed at us, mumbling words. What did she do? 


From Alyssa McNamara 

1 comment:

  1. Great story Alyssa, with lots of suspense. Just watch your use, and mixing up of the present and past tenses.
    Thanks
    Abby, Team100WC Reading UK

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