Tuesday, May 19, 2015

Erana - The windy day


I wake up as the sun shone brightly upon my face.
I get out of bed and put my cosey pink slippers on.
Once i got out of bed i needed to get my uniform from the cloths line out side but the ferocious wind was to strong.
I kept walking to the cloths line to get my uniform the wind was nearly pushing me over.
i finally got my uniform and tried to get back inside.
the energy of the wind was to strong i flew across my lawn and face planted into the ground.
'AHH' i screamed trying to stand up it was to hard...

BY ERANA
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5 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 24, 2015 at 4:33 PM

    I like your story, but next time make sure your story makes sense. And check on your spelling!
    - Kaitlyn

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  2. AnonymousMay 24, 2015 at 4:36 PM

    nice story erana
    next time make sure all of your I's are capital

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  3. AnonymousMay 24, 2015 at 4:42 PM

    HAHA FUNNY STORY! THE CHARACTER IN THERE SOUNDS JUST LIKE YOU. NEXT TIME USE MORE PUNCTUATION.
    -CHAVAWN :)

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  4. AnonymousMay 24, 2015 at 4:55 PM

    I liked your story but you have to make share you use grammer.

    Ashley

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  5. AnonymousJune 1, 2015 at 5:56 AM

    Hi Erana,
    Well done on this story. It's almost written like a poem and I love poetry! You've used nice descriptive words and adverbs to describe the verbs which is a great way of making your story come to life.
    Always check that when you use 'I' to refer to yourself that it has a capital letter.
    Well done.
    Thomas (Team 100WC Ireland)

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