Ring ring the bell goes .It's Thursdays and our class has got cross-country practise after morning tea. Mrs Parker says ” all right kids were going on our run “ but the class says "it’s too stormy out there “ so Mrs parker said “if the kids who don’t want to go stand by the heater and the kids who do want to go stand by the door. Me and my friends went and stood by the door and ran. It was real stormy and there was thunder lighting but the ferocious wind was the bad bit. I come forth out of ten.
By Luke
Sounds fun!!!
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wow runing in thunder and bad wind how hard your word choose may need help but all your other story have been getting better and this one is awesome by sarah (in your class)
ReplyDeleteOmg Luke... were there only 10 of us? That was really fun! The story really is a summary of what it was like! Next time focus on the descriptive langauge!
ReplyDelete~Zena~
Dear Luke,
ReplyDeleteI love your story opener - what a way to set the scene!
Make sure next time you proof-read carefully for spelling and punctuation.
All the best,
Miss Dodd
Team 100WC
(Banbury - UK)