Wednesday, May 27, 2015

Zena-The mysterious note!


Huge golden rays of moonlight stream off the calm, beautiful ocean revealing a beautiful little girl sitting alone on a peice of driftwood just staring out at sea with a distant lookin her eyes. Then she seemed to spot something bobbing along in the ocean towards her. She walked cautiously over to the strange object and noticed that it was a floating bottle, but not just any bottle, this one had something in it. So as she lifted the lid she noticed that there was a note in there! She pulled it out and unfolded it. It read:
'SAVE YOURSELF!' *:-O surprise

By Zena

2 comments:

  1. I have been asked to post this comment as the team member does not have any of the options in the drop down menu. Please add 'Name' so that anyone can comment. Some would not go to the trouble of asking me to do it for them!
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    Mrs Skinner (team 100)

    Hi Zena
    What wonderfully descriptive words...and what a good story.
    You have created a sense of mystery and that is not easy to do.
    Don't forget to read through your story when you have finished. Can you spot the spelling mistake?
    Think about using shorter sentences...that first sentence left me breathless.
    Great ending and great story Zena! More please.
    Greg T

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    1. Hi there, thankyou for your comment. I am unsure what you mean by adding 'name', it is already there in the dropdown menu? Please advise

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